Pg 5 first par — reporter speaks about a "sex slave ring" and speaks in the plural "sex slaves" suggesting more than one accusation Pg 8 1st par — reporter should clarify that the young women at your house (and later on your plane) are comely but clearly not underage Pg 20- might lead a reader to think you helped clients hide wealth raises flags) Pg 21 — Hoffenberg mentioned — I assume from what everyone including J Sweet says he is nuts but not flattering and totally irrelevant to the story Pg 25 — quoting you on massages — your adversaries will exploit this to show a lack of remorse, minimizing